Author: 2nyeoshidaelove
Genie Reviewer - Scorpio
Story Title: 5/5
I like your story title as it gives off a very wild feeling about the story and yet did not give out much hints about the plot. It makes readers wonder who or what in the story is happening that is actually crazy. I do not like story titles that gives away hints on the plot of the story, it totally kills the suspense as readers know what to expect. Good job!
Appearance (Does it look eye catching): 9/10
I like your poster and background! Its very nice, and the background is very matching with the poster too! But a poster should appear on every chapter, and you did not put it in your chapter 1.
Forewords/Introduction: 4/10
Forewords are supposed to be a short summary or prologue of the actual story, and maybe give some teasers. However, your forewords did not tell anything about the story besides the song that inspired you and character introduction, so it is basically not a proper foreword. And your summary, its just not proper.
Plot: 13/20
A typical story about a couple breaking up because of a third party. There’s too many of that around! Its so cliché already. And whoever in their right mind would have sex in the middle of the cinema right in front of everyone in public? It’s ridiculous and not realistic. Please think through first and see if it is actually possible to happen in real life.
Characterization: 10/10
Although you used your own fictional characters, it is good that you gave them a name instead of leaving a blank like some of the stories I’ve seen. As I am also not into Korean pop, I am neutral about the characters you use.
Creativity/Originality: 3/5
Like I said, a part of your story is not realistic. Sex in a public place is too extreme, maybe finding out by seeing them kissing would do. A couple with a party being demanding and the other giving in is still not sighted much, hence it is kind of original.
Spelling/Vocabulary/Grammar/Punctuations: 8/10
“As usual, I apologized for 1000’s times.” I understand that you are trying to emphasize the great number of times that he apologized, but that is too much of an exaggeration. “As usual, I apologized profusely/many times.” Would do.
“Our relationship were like this” there is only one relationship, hence it should be “Our relationship was like this”.
Flow (Does it all go together): 10/10
Your flow is fine as I was able to understand the happenings of the story. Keep it up, don’t leave out important parts that is required for the readers to understand the story.
Writing Style: 11/15
Your writing style in the story is fine, but certain parts when you are trying to show the setting of the story like after school, you put it as a heading and underlined it. This really turns me off as it not only does not look nice, it spoils your overall writing style! I’ve actually also seen other authors that write better, but the body of your story is fine.
Overall Enjoyment: 3/5
Overall is fine, its just those parts I mentioned above that ticks me off and affect my overall enjoyment of the story. But yes, I still did enjoy it, not entirely bad, but not entirely good either.
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