Author: Pararae
Genie Reviewer: Scorpio
Story Title: 5/5
Its wonderful! Just the kind of titles that I like. Doesn’t give away a major hint about the story, and yet keeps readers interested about the main article of the story which in here is actually the music, or melody and how is it actually related to the plot. I also personally think it is a very nice title, it sounds nice too.
Appearance (Does it look eye catching): 9/10
The appearance is great, the background and designs matches the story setting well. However I took that mark away because I think you lack a poster, I think it would look nicer if a poster is done.
Forewords/Introduction: 9/10
Your forewords is not bad, however, I think it is slightly shorter than the usual length of forewords. I understand that this is a one-shot and you do not want to give away much of the storyline too, so it is fine.
Plot: 20/20
Definitely a great plot! I was expecting them to end up together like a typical love story, but you caught me by surprise as they remained friends till the very end. One of those rare stories that actually writes about friendship instead of romance. I hope to see more of such stories online nowadays!
Characterization: 10/10
I’m not into Korean pop, hence I have no objections about the pairing you use.
Creativity/Originality: 4/5
I’ve read before stories that uses music as the storyline, but its not too common yet so I guess its fine.
Spelling/Vocabulary/Grammar/Punctuations: 8/10
“clad in white collared shirt underneath the deep blue vest” Its supposed to be “A white collared shirt”.
“my mind are still replaying our first memory like a DVD player” It should be “my mind IS”.
“after watching him from a far for so many years” There is no need for a space between afar.
Your vocabulary is very good, many descriptive words that bring out the story. Its just those minor grammar mistakes, watch out for them next time.
Flow (Does it all go together): 8/10
I get the point that your story is actually about their first meeting, while the ending just states what is actually happening at that time. I feel that the ending is quite rushed, you could actually write a few more things so that readers can know more details.
Writing Style: 15/15
Your writing style is very good! I would love to see more authors like you write online. You used the ‘show don’t tell’ method, which actually allows the readers to be able to ‘feel’ the story instead of just reading it plainly. The ending was also not bad, it’s not an abrupt ending unlike some other stories I’ve read. There’s a progress to it. Keep it up!
Overall Enjoyment: 5/5
I have definitely enjoyed your story, and I’m sure your readers do too! Its difficult to find such good writers nowadays, so keep up with your stories and all the best!
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